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Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:14:00 No.2267017 View View Reply Original Report

Quoted By: >>2267019 >>2267024 >>2267041

I am an aspiring poet/writer
I have just finished a book consisting of 50 poems: I am barely 18, and this would be my first published work.

How do I go about publishing it, /lit/?

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:15:00 No.2267019 Report

Quoted By: >>2267020

>>2267017
Gonna bump until you help, /adv/

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:15:00 No.2267020 Report

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>>2267019
>>2267019
Stupid me. I meant /lit/

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:16:00 No.2267023 Report

Quoted By: >>2267029

don't, they're probably all shit

if they're not, try and submit individual ones to journals and get some out there that way, then maybe if they're really good someone will publish a collection or something, but don't expect to make any money off it

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:17:00 No.2267024 Report

Quoted By: >>2267028

>>2267017
Post one and we can make fun of your shitty angsty poetry.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:18:00 No.2267028 Report

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>>2267024
>>2267024
Stupid me. I meant post one and we can appreciate your shitty angsty poetry.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:18:00 No.2267029 Report

Quoted By: >>2267035 >>2267039

>>2267023
I'm not expecting money, not at all.
And they're not shit.

Why is it more advisable to submit them as individuals rather than as a collection?
And how do I go about doing that?

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:19:00 No.2267032 Report

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They are probably all not very good, you might find them cringeworthy in a few years.

You won't be able to get it published but you can try submitting your best to journals and such, keep an eye out for competitions and try to develop some sort of name for yourself.

Mind posting some examples of your work?

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:19:00 No.2267034 Report

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The poetry I wrote has nothing to do with emotions. Imagine it as being in the same vein as 'Gods of Pegana' by Dunsany.

And don't be stupid- I've been working on these poems for years. I'm not giving them out so you can take and claim them as your own.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:20:00 No.2267035 Report

Quoted By: >>2267042

>>2267029
nobody wants to publish a poetry collection because nobody wants to buy some no-name motherfucker's poetry

but people still read literary journals sometimes so there's some profit there

research literary journals & submit them according to instructions

also, post one or two of them here so we can find out that they're shit (your poems are probably shit, btw, even if you don't think so)

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:21:00 No.2267039 Report

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>>2267029

literary journals and magazines solicit poetry all the time but i can't imagine any publishers out there are champing at the bit to publish a 50 poem book of poems by an unpublished writer

once you start getting some stuff in journals or whatever maybe get at some publishers about doing a chapbook or whatever?

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:21:00 No.2267041 Report

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>>2267017
1.Post one of your poems
2.??????
3. Profit!

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:22:00 No.2267042 Report

Quoted By: >>2267044 >>2267049 >>2267052 >>2267066 >>2267074 >>2267100 >>2267141 >>2267216 >>2267335

>>2267035
The Lonely West

In sundered hills
The flowers grow

In open skies
The Great birds soar

On distant peaks
The Thunder roars

In empty lands
Dead cities mourn
---
The murals fade,
Yet stone remains

The flowers die,
The World turns grey

The courts are stilled,
And Silence reigns

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:23:00 No.2267044 Report

Quoted By: >>2267045

>>2267042
haha suck shit OP, i'm stealing this. imma be rich and knee deep in hipster pussy.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:24:00 No.2267045 Report

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>>2267044
Good luck: that was one out of 50 poems.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:24:00 No.2267046 Report

Quoted By: >>2267050

Hey OP, nobody cares about poetry.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:25:00 No.2267049 Report

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>>2267042
Eh Corazon, toss me your email address won't you?

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:25:00 No.2267050 Report

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>>2267046
This poetry serves to establish a vague sense of feeling for the full-fledged novels that I plan to write.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:26:00 No.2267052 Report

Quoted By: >>2267057

>>2267042
it's not as terrible as i would have thought but it's also not really interesting

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:27:00 No.2267057 Report

Quoted By: >>2267062

>>2267052
It's only one poem out of fifty, and it's not even the first one. There is a context in which it is placed. Poetry can tell a story, you know.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:29:00 No.2267062 Report

Quoted By: >>2267069 >>2267080

>>2267057
I thought /lit/ would have offered better advice.
You think I didn't go to people I know for reviewing? I went with friends and english teachers - it was my teacher who suggested I publish. These poems were just a way to pass time for me.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:30:00 No.2267066 Report

Quoted By: >>2267072

>>2267042
Yes, OP, nearly not overwrought.
Give it some time. Read some James Merrill and some Andrew Hudgins for narrative poetry.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:30:00 No.2267069 Report

Quoted By: >>2267076

>>2267062

you've gotten good advice -- submit piecemeal to journals/magazines instead of submitting the poems all in one chunk

also your teacher's on crack but that's beside the point

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:31:00 No.2267072 Report

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>>2267066
What exactly is it you mean?

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:32:00 No.2267074 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267042
Not unpleasant, but definitely banal.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:33:00 No.2267076 Report

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>>2267069
Please, you over-estimate the importance of your advice.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:33:00 No.2267077 Report

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Submit them to a manuscript contest. The Poets & Writers website has a database of them. You can also try Duotrope Digest, search set to "manuscript" length. The Yale Younger Poets and The National Poetry series are the most prestigious.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:33:00 No.2267080 Report

Quoted By: >>2267089

>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062

Would you prefer to have my email? It's kokoro rococo at geemail, minus the space between the kokoro and the rococo.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:33:00 No.2267081 Report

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OP, /lit/ is a slow as shit board. Also you've been a total fuckwit I don't think many people are going to be willing to help you.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:34:00 No.2267084 Report

Quoted By: >>2267093

youre not even 18, are you

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:36:00 No.2267089 Report

Quoted By: >>2267098

>>2267080
Thing is, there's a chance I might know you in real life, for I know many friends that frequent this site (I know of at least five who said they regularly frequent /lit/)

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:36:00 No.2267093 Report

Quoted By: >>2267098

>>2267084
Good luck proving I'm not.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:38:00 No.2267096 Report

Quoted By: >>2267103 >>2267216

My poetry, when combined, creates this legendarium or mythology, similar to Yeats and his Byzantium mythology that he created in his poems.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:39:00 No.2267098 Report

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>>2267089
>>2267093
I don't really care, it's just that you've been acting like a real fuckwit here. Despite the fact that we've given you pretty useful advice. So idek.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:41:00 No.2267100 Report

Quoted By: >>2267105 >>2267109

>>2267042
I like it. Don't know whats ruffling everyone else's feathers

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:41:00 No.2267101 Report

Quoted By: >>2267107 >>2267108 >>2267119

You jelly?
Just because here comes a real old-school poet who can actually rhyme (not like those awful modern poets with their discordant freestyle) and stares into your face, you feel like putting me down, because hardly anyone here has any writing talent, though you pretend to be big fucking intellectuals by posting threads about books whose plots you read off of Wikipedia and owning big books and using big words in the hopes you look smarter.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:43:00 No.2267103 Report

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>>2267096
Pro-tip: don't say "does" say "I try to," "aims," etc. Saying "does" makes you sound like you're full of yourself.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:43:00 No.2267105 Report

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>>2267100
The poem's not the issue.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:44:00 No.2267107 Report

Quoted By: >>2267110

>>2267101
lol. humility is a virtue, man.

you probably will achieve more as a writer than 9/10 of the people on this board if you keep working (not that this is saying much) but you gotta check your fucking ego

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:44:00 No.2267108 Report

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>>2267101

you are a beautiful person

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LBeg7CZqSx0

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:44:00 No.2267109 Report

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>>2267100
Thank you

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:46:00 No.2267110 Report

Quoted By: >>2267114

>>2267107
Thing is, I don't really mnd If i achieve much or not - I just want the poetry to be published. Even if NO one reads it. I want it out there.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:46:00 No.2267112 Report

Quoted By: >>2267115

>OP comes in here for help
>Acts high and mighty, disses people who have offered help

uhuh...

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:47:00 No.2267114 Report

Quoted By: >>2267118

>>2267110
Then make a blog

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:48:00 No.2267115 Report

Quoted By: >>2267117 >>2267121 >>2267122 >>2267123

>>2267112
>Implying your insults are advice.

Seriously? So I should just remain all humble and complacent while you bash my work? I understand if you say it's not good, but some of you people immediately start jumping on it for no reason other than your jealousy.

If you're going to criticize it, then tell me WHY you criticized it.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:49:00 No.2267117 Report

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>>2267115

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:49:00 No.2267118 Report

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>>2267114
Go kill yourself instead.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:49:00 No.2267119 Report

Quoted By: >>2267120 >>2267124

>>2267101
You think you're hot shit? Your poem's nothing. It's got rhyme, meter, sure, but you're trading in psuedo-profundity. If you slap "the" onto something, it doesn't make it momentous. Hey, some birds, some flowers, some thunder, some mountains, they signify the ephemeral nature of things -- wow, this sounds new and interesting, especially the brilliant metaphors.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:50:00 No.2267120 Report

Quoted By: >>2267129

>>2267119
Again, you fail to understand that this poem is out of context. You would need to read the rest of the other poems to find a meaning to it.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:51:00 No.2267121 Report

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>>2267115
People have offered honest advice and you've called them stupid and put them down.

I haven't seen much criticism about the poem at all, it seems fine to me but you're just a total arsehole.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:51:00 No.2267122 Report

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>>2267115
people were offering sincere, legitimate advice when they told you to submit pieces to individual journals & that it would be nearly impossible to get 50 poems published as a collection, duder

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:51:00 No.2267123 Report

Quoted By: >>2267125

>>2267115
People have said what's wrong with it: it doesn't really say anything or have any overly interesting images. That's not to say it doesn't have potential. People have given you places to look for possible submission, have given you specific writers to look at. That's pretty good advice.

Corazon Di Poeta

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Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:52:00 No.2267124 Report

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>>2267119
I'm sure you're a poetic genius.
I'm certain your works are astounding masterpieces-to-be.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:53:00 No.2267125 Report

Quoted By: >>2267130 >>2267139 >>2267155

>>2267123
Oh my god, it seems that I underestimate the stupidity and/or blindness of some people here.

Did you not read? The above poem is OUT OF CONTEXT. It serves only to reinforce that which other poems that I have written have introducted.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:56:00 No.2267129 Report

Quoted By: >>2267133

>>2267120
Mediocre ingredients do not make an excellent meal.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:56:00 No.2267130 Report

Quoted By: >>2267131 >>2267140

>>2267125
This is the advice /lit/ gives?
Come on, even /x/ gave better commentary, and they're a bunch of delusional teenagers.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:56:00 No.2267131 Report

Quoted By: >>2267138

>>2267130
There's an old Italian saying... "If you act like a pompous dickhead, no one wants to help you."

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:57:00 No.2267133 Report

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>>2267129
>calling this poem mediocre

And, yes you could. You can have the most mediocre food, but with preparation and dedication, make it taste great.

OP Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:57:00 No.2267136 Report

Quoted By: >>2267144

GIVE ME YOUR HELP YOU FUCKING PLEBS. YOU'RE ALL FUCKING STUPID FUCKS YOU CAN'T WRITE FOR SHIT, HELP ME! I WANT TO BE PUBLISHED, MY ENGLISH TEACHER SAID SO YOU FUCKING PLEBS, SO FUCKING HELP ME YOU WORTHLESS WRITERS. MY FRIENDS SAY MY POEMS ARE GOOD. FUCK YOU FUCKING FUCKS, HELP ME GET PUBLISHED.

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Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:58:00 No.2267137 Report

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Calm your tits people. He asked for help, you called it shit, he got defensive, you got pissed at him being defensive

50% of you people need to head back over to /b/

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:58:00 No.2267138 Report

Quoted By: >>2267156

>>2267131
>>2267131
>implying i'd take advice from Italy, one of the worst nations in Europe.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:58:00 No.2267139 Report

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>>2267125

>It serves only to reinforce that which other poems that I have written have introducted.

So it's a an unnecessary poem? Also stop whinging about how people take the poem YOU CHOSE TO REPRESENT YOUR WORK
Also: introduced

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:58:00 No.2267140 Report

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>>2267130
>delusional teenager

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:58:00 No.2267141 Report

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>>2267042
Yuck
"Silence reigns"
"Thunder Roars"
"Birds soar"

Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:58:00 No.2267142 Report

Quoted By: >>2267150 >>2267151 >>2267156 >>2267162 >>2267216

Alright guise, I've cooled my jets. Yes, I have a bit of an ego, which sometimes comes out.
Just to set the other one more in context, here's another one I penned but this gloaming.

When dreaming I'm guided to another world
Time and time again
At sunrise I fight to stay asleep
'Cause I don't want to leave the comfort of this place
'Cause there's a hunger, a longing to escape
From the life I live when I'm awake
So let's go there
Let's make our escape
Come on, let's go there
Let's ask can we stay?

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

Although I would like our world to change
It helps me to appreciate
Those nights and those dreams
But, my friend, I'd sacrifice all those nights
If I could make the Earth and my dreams the same
The only difference is
To let love replace all our hate
So let's go there
Let's make our escape
Come on, let's go there
Let's ask can we stay?

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

So lets go there, lets go there,
Come on, lets go there
Lets ask can we stay?

Up high I feel like I'm alive for the very first time
Set up high I'm strong enough to take these dreams
And make them mine
Set up high I'm strong enough to take these dreams
And make them mine

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:59:00 No.2267144 Report

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>>2267136
Well, MOST (not all) of you are pretty stupid.
You don't even take time to evaluate: you just start 'trolling', thinking you're all cool.

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:59:00 No.2267147 Report

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well Poetry.com died so your are SOL. they took anything and everything and said it was awesome.

good luck finding a publisher. there are severl books compiled of them that tell you what each is looking for.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 09:59:00 No.2267148 Report

Quoted By: >>2267159 >>2267162

Good poem.

Too bad OP is a massive douche.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:00:00 No.2267150 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267142

This was better when Creed did it.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:00:00 No.2267151 Report

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>>2267142
That's not my style.
That is way too contemporary.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:00:00 No.2267155 Report

Quoted By: >>2267165

>>2267125

i love you, heart of poetry

i want to kiss your belligerent little cheek hot with rage

i love the way you cherrypick the least helpful posts to seethe and spit at and blissfully gloss over the ones offering helpful advice

i love the reactionary bile with which you rail at free verse like an enraged grandpa in tweed

stay here forever, corazon

mi corazon

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:01:00 No.2267156 Report

Quoted By: >>2267160 >>2267172

>>2267138
lol

>>2267142
this is definitely Not Very Good. first, it's obvious and didactic: there's no imagery or anything, it's just "wouldn't it be nice if the world were a better place?". the rhythm and language and sound are basically unexceptional - they're not horrible but there's nothing good about them, it doesn't really sound like anything. basically in the deployment of image and sound and in most everything a poem should do, it just doesn't.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:01:00 No.2267159 Report

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>>2267148
Thanks. And i mean that sincerely.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:02:00 No.2267160 Report

Quoted By: >>2267178

>>2267156
those are creed lyrics.

not that i listen to creed.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:02:00 No.2267162 Report

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As the poster of >>2267148
>>2267142
Much better poem+apology is nice.
Sorry that some people aren't very encouraging.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:03:00 No.2267165 Report

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>>2267155
God, I swear I know you.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:03:00 No.2267166 Report

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lol is that a song by creed

lol

lol

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:03:00 No.2267167 Report

Quoted By: >>2267173

ITT: People critique Creed lyrics.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:04:00 No.2267171 Report

Quoted By: >>2267181

Here's some Yeats. OP, ask yourself honestly if you should be comparing yourself.

The Cat and the Moon

The cat went here and there
And the moon spun round like a top,
And the nearest kin of the moon,
The creeping cat, looked up.
Black Minnaloushe stared at the moon,
For, wander and wail as he would,
The pure cold light in the sky
Troubled his animal blood.
Minnaloushe runs in the grass
Lifting his delicate feet.
Do you dance, Minnaloushe, do you dance?
When two close kindred meet,
What better than call a dance?
Maybe the moon may learn,
Tired of that courtly fashion,
A new dance turn.
Minnaloushe creeps through the grass
From moonlit place to place,
The sacred moon overhead
Has taken a new phase.
Does Minnaloushe know that his pupils
Will pass from change to change,
And that from round to crescent,
From crescent to round they range?
Minnaloushe creeps through the grass
Alone, important and wise,
And lifts to the changing moon
His changing eyes.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:04:00 No.2267172 Report

Quoted By: >>2267183 >>2267184 >>2267185

>>2267156
Are you seriously that fucking stupid.
You people asked for a sample of MY writing, and you expect ME to just simply hand you my pieces, my thought-children?

I handed you the most bland and least-valuable poem: you I think I would risk posting one of my more valuable works for you un-talented dimwits to steal and claim as your own?

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:04:00 No.2267173 Report

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>>2267167
>mfw I called it a much better poem
Excuse me while I bash my head against a wall for being mentally impaired.

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:05:00 No.2267178 Report

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>>2267160
>not that I listen to creed

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:06:00 No.2267181 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267171
Yeats is alright. though he doesn't come up to me or other poets.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:06:00 No.2267183 Report

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>>2267172
>thought-children
>implying this is a phrase actually used by people
>implying real poets would ever dream of using such an irritating phrase

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:06:00 No.2267184 Report

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>>2267172
>you I think I would risk posting one of my more valuable works for you un-talented dimwits to steal and claim as your own?

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Oh god my sides.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:07:00 No.2267185 Report

Quoted By: >>2267191

>>2267172
never stop, you beautiful creature

(we assumed your poems would be shit because you're under 18 years old and you think that your poems are really good. because in nearly every case people in those situations, they are not very good poets. that's why we thought that. just fyi)

TheGrandPoemer

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TheGrandPoemer Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:08:00 No.2267187 Report

Quoted By: >>2267197

Mi corazon, mi corazon
Dancing deep within the bathosphere
Himself a raging roid addict
Addic-dick Kick-case
Cuckoo-face, poo-poo-face
In before, nigger jigaboo moo
Cow, cuckoo!, it's jigs in place
A plastic face, strapped over a
Bank robber's facade
But then again, aren't we all
Just de Sade, but perhaps a bit
More moderate
Perhaps a bit more von Sacher-Masoch
Than Sadist
Masochist a bit more
Than poltergeist, poultry-heist
A foul a stench
A monkey's wrench, a hen, a green swan
Black, a Natalie Portman batting down the
Hatches with OP, in their little butthurt
Little black submarine
The Black Keys

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:08:00 No.2267189 Report

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10/10

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:08:00 No.2267191 Report

Quoted By: >>2267206 >>2267207

>>2267185
My God, does it matter if a number of these were written while I was under 18?
What does it matter, at all?
I'm not some general population retard; I'm not generic idiot born of idiots.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:09:00 No.2267197 Report

Quoted By: >>2267208

>>2267187
das racist is the new kool-G rap

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:10:00 No.2267202 Report

Quoted By: >>2267209

the back wings
of the

hospital where
nothing

will grow lie
cinders

In which shine
the broken

pieces of a green
bottle

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:11:00 No.2267205 Report

Quoted By: >>2267211

What else did I expect from 4Chan?
I came looking for legitimate commentary.
What do I get?
A troll thread.

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:11:00 No.2267206 Report

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>>2267191
>I'm not generic idiot born of idiots.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:11:00 No.2267207 Report

Quoted By: >>2267217

>>2267191
because people who are that young are rarely very good at writing poetry. their poetry is nearly always maudlin and overly sentimental, and they rarely have developed any skill at writing.

TheGrandPoemer

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TheGrandPoemer Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:11:00 No.2267208 Report

Quoted By: >>2267222

>>2267197
Mah nigga.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:11:00 No.2267209 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267202
No rhyme, no imagery.
Boring, pretentious.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:12:00 No.2267211 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267205
Yeah, but you're the troll.

(unless your posts ITT are serious? In which case it's even funnier)

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:12:00 No.2267216 Report

Quoted By: >>2267225 >>2267228 >>2267233 >>2267237 >>2267504

>>2267096
>>2267142
>>2267042
Holy fuck you actually don't realize how shitty you are. You're boring. You're using cliche images, amateur style, there's nothing setting you apart from the hundreds of other angsty kids who think that they're 'gifted' and get torn apart on here.

Read some actual poetry you fucking pompous kid, and realize yours is shit. I have tons of this kind of shit laying around in old notebooks. I'm also a published poet, because I moved past that immature phase and got into my own style.

Only thing you're going to achieve with this shit is a nice collection of rejection letters.

Also, reported for underage.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:13:00 No.2267217 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267207
As I said, mine is not sentimental.
It is not emotional, it is not love poetry, nor anything connected to my feelings.
These poems are about a place I created which I plan to use for a novel later on (someday....)

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:13:00 No.2267222 Report

Quoted By: >>2267226

>>2267208
They're actually really boring live.

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:14:00 No.2267223 Report

Quoted By:

Dear OP,
Please go to bed.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:14:00 No.2267225 Report

Quoted By: >>2267227 >>2267263

>>2267216
Not underage. 18.
But I get banned: who cares?
At least I'll have a reason to stop visiting this cancer-infested site.

TheGrandPoemer

TheGrandPoemer Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:15:00 No.2267226 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267222
They kind of seem like they would be.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:15:00 No.2267227 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267225
You're just proving the point by ignoring the comments on the poetry. It is a cancer-wrought site, we have faggots like you constantly.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:16:00 No.2267228 Report

Quoted By: >>2267241 >>2267263

>>2267216
I don't think I'm gifted.
I am gifted.
And I'm pretty convinced you are lying.
You could have brought on the point about you being a poet earlier on.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:16:00 No.2267233 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267216

corazon di poeta needs not your jejune negativity

corazon di poeta will establish a vague sense of feeling for his full-fledged novels and you cannot stop him nor slow his progress, he throbs with the rhyme and meter of a million glowing shakespeares gone supernova

"they say the heart of poetry is still beating" - huey lewis

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:17:00 No.2267237 Report

Quoted By: >>2267250 >>2267263

>>2267216
Againg, >thinking I shared with you one of my more prized works.

This work I posted is but a companion, a reinforcement of a poem that comes before it.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:18:00 No.2267238 Report

Quoted By: >>2267243

Shit got real niggas
Op is pissed about trolls
so he becomes one

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:18:00 No.2267241 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267228
You're gifted but you don't think you are? Why would you say that you're gifted if you don't think you are?

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:19:00 No.2267243 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267238
some epic shit ITT

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:20:00 No.2267247 Report

Quoted By: >>2267271

My life, your light green eyes
Have /lit/ on me with joy.
There's nothing I don't know
Or shall not know again,
Over and over again.
It's noon, it's dawn, it's night,
I am the dog that dies
In the deep street of Troy
Tomorrow, long ago-
Part of me dims with pain,
Becomes the stinging flies,
The bent head of the boy.
Part looks into your light
And lives to tell you so.

What do you think, OP?

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:20:00 No.2267250 Report

Quoted By: >>2267261

>>2267237
>sharing a shit poem to represent yourself
>get mad when people tell you it's shit

it's like having a name immediately turns people into retards

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:20:00 No.2267251 Report

Quoted By: >>2267256 >>2267265 >>2267267 >>2267270

Honestly, my writing and creative skills far surpass those of all the people on ALL 4chan combined.

If I had but been born earlier, I would have taken King's or Tolkien's or Lovecraft's or Poe's place; I would have been Tolstoy or Flaubert, or even Shakespeare.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:21:00 No.2267256 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267251
Sure.
No need to ridicule you for that post.
Sage for obvious troll.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:22:00 No.2267258 Report

Quoted By:

sage

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:22:00 No.2267260 Report

Quoted By:

born from the butt of greatness

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:22:00 No.2267261 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267250
I do not think it is shit.
I do however think it is unable to be judged fairly because it is out of context and weak by itself.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:22:00 No.2267263 Report

Quoted By: >>2267282

>>2267237
>>2267228
>>2267225
You can't even decide on a comeback fast enough to put it all in one post.

I'm not implying anything other than the fact you're writing shitty, generic poetry that hundreds of thousands of teens have already written and discarded. You're allowed to continue to hide behind a delusion of talent though, you're the only one that's going to fail horribly and get frustrated.

Or you could realize you're fucking shit, and improve. But that would take a minimal amount of intelligence and self-awareness that you clearly lack.

Have fun, kid.

Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:22:00 No.2267265 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267251
ಠ_ಠ

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:23:00 No.2267267 Report

Quoted By: >>2267284

>>2267251
I don't know who that is, but it isn't me. I am Corazon Di Poeta

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:23:00 No.2267270 Report

Quoted By: >>2267292

>>2267251
>>2267251

Screenshot this shit now.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:23:00 No.2267271 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267247
Idk. It's a little to optimistic.
Whenever light is mentioned in my poems it's always emanating from within my soul and society always stomps it out...

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:24:00 No.2267275 Report

Quoted By:

"who is corazon di poeta?" - ayn rand

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:25:00 No.2267282 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267263
I'm 100% sure that no teen has ever written what I have, pops.

I am better, more talented. You simply wish to bring me down, just as the idiots and losers always wish to bring down those that are more skilled than them.

I doubt you are a poet, but if you are, I'm sure you are a total nobody, an unknown.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:26:00 No.2267284 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267267
No, I am Corazon Di Poeta

Ignorant cancer likes me so much they're stealing my name as well as my work

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:26:00 No.2267290 Report

Quoted By:

Wouldn't this thread be so much better if everyone was Corazon Di Poeta? Think of the harmony.

Corazon Di Poeta

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Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:27:00 No.2267291 Report

Quoted By:

WE CORAZON DI POETA NOW

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:27:00 No.2267292 Report

Quoted By: >>2267306 >>2267313

>>2267270

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:28:00 No.2267295 Report

Quoted By:

We are the 99%
We are Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:29:00 No.2267298 Report

Quoted By: >>2267301

This has been an absolute waste of time.
I take my leave: I was the fool for having thought any thread on 4Chan could give meaningful advice.

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:30:00 No.2267299 Report

Quoted By:

Are you a wiza-CORAZON Di POETA?

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:30:00 No.2267301 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267298
Never mind guys I'm still here

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:30:00 No.2267302 Report

Quoted By: >>2267311 >>2267312

I had to get a tripcode but I assure you that I am the real Corazon Di Poeta.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:31:00 No.2267306 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267292
Oh yeah, this one's going on the repost pile.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:32:00 No.2267307 Report

Quoted By:

OP can't into
writing poems herp derp
go kill yourself fag

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:32:00 No.2267310 Report

Quoted By:

OP was an asshole.
But his poem was decent

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:32:00 No.2267311 Report

Quoted By: >>2267363

>>2267302
But I'm the real Corazon. Do I need to get a trip too?

Corazon Di Poeta !XIxc6BpKnU

Corazon Di Poeta !XIxc6BpKnU Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:32:00 No.2267312 Report

Quoted By: >>2267320 >>2267363

>>2267302

I assure you that that tripcode is a farce. Pretty much because I'm Shakespeare

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:32:00 No.2267313 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267292
Or perhaps a bit more serviceable.

Corazon Di Poeta !!fMq8ZXuIWTO

Corazon Di Poeta !!fMq8ZXuIWTO Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:33:00 No.2267316 Report

Quoted By: >>2267342 >>2267363

Ignore the impostors. It is I, Corazon Di Poeta.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:34:00 No.2267320 Report

Quoted By: >>2267325 >>2267326 >>2267342 >>2267363

>>2267312
Ha! My tripcode is #betterthanshakespeare, this is how you know I am the real one.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:36:00 No.2267325 Report

Quoted By: >>2267342 >>2267356 >>2267363

>>2267320
Out of here, you imposter.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:36:00 No.2267326 Report

Quoted By: >>2267342 >>2267356 >>2267363

>>2267320
Never mind me, I'm just an impostor

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:37:00 No.2267327 Report

Quoted By: >>2267334

I hope - no I wait, I KNOW that this kid is so butthurt right now.

"Screw this! I didn't want to be in your club anyway!"

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:39:00 No.2267334 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267327
OP was a faggot, sure: but his poetry wasn't that bad.
He's the 1% of poets who actually use rhyme, instead of the 99% who don't use rhyme scheme (hurr durr, too hipster - go free verse shit!)

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:39:00 No.2267335 Report

Quoted By: >>2267344

>>2267042
So dry it put me to sleep.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:39:00 No.2267337 Report

Quoted By: >>2267363

No, I am Corazon Di Poeta.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

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Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:42:00 No.2267342 Report

Quoted By: >>2267363

>>2267316
>>2267320
>>2267325
>>2267326

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:42:00 No.2267344 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267335
Well, I kind of liked it.
It resonates.
But, that's just me.
Because, personally, I think real poetry is a dying art.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:46:00 No.2267355 Report

Quoted By: >>2267360 >>2267363

Stop trying to pretend that you're me guys. You all so fucking jealous that you can't even admit my poetry is better that anything you'll ever writing.

Faggot neckbeard losers.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:46:00 No.2267356 Report

Quoted By: >>2267363

>>2267325
>>2267326
What villainy is this?! I assumed that my tripcode was secure, as any plebeian trying to duplicate what is typed by my hand would have their digits to turn into heart devouring maggots. But you imposters seem to be using black sorcery of some sort and I ask of you to stop before I call the police as tripcode theft is a crime!

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:50:00 No.2267360 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267355
>implying I would use such banal language as "neckbeard" or "faggot"

Please, you belittle my artistic talent.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:50:00 No.2267362 Report

Quoted By:

I love you, Corazon.
Your expression of nature
That is the human kind.
The manifestation of sins into word
Which you spew onto a table of vagrants.
But I love you
If for nothing else the smile your shitty poetry gifts to me.
And if you ever compare yourself to Shakespeare again, I will hire a hitman to rape your mother and kill your dog.

Corazon Di Pomento

Corazon Di Pomento Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:51:00 No.2267363 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267311
>>2267312
>>2267316
>>2267320
>>2267325
>>2267326
>>2267337
>>2267342
>>2267355
>>2267356
Fie, devils! To whom do I complain on account of this attempted literary usurpation!? It is only I and I alone who to be poetry kind! And rhyming no less!

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:51:00 No.2267365 Report

Quoted By:

You guys clearly show how plebeian you truly are.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:51:00 No.2267366 Report

Quoted By:

>Dead art
FTFY

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:53:00 No.2267372 Report

Quoted By:

Can you post another of your poems so we can better offer you advice OP

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:54:00 No.2267376 Report

Quoted By:

I have to keep telling myself OP i a troll, because I honestly have known people like this who were so convinced they were so great they could be published, or sponsored, or what have you.

You are no different than anyone else, OP.

Ask yourself: What do you have to offer the literary arts besides boring phrasing and the same images we've all seen again and again.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:55:00 No.2267378 Report

Quoted By: >>2267382

let's form a Corazon Di Poeta society. We'll all contribute terrible poetry and then compliment each other for being better than Shakespeare and Milton

Cuadro de Pimiento

Cuadro de Pimiento Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:56:00 No.2267382 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267378
This sounds like it has potential.

Huevos de Culo

Huevos de Culo Tue 20 Dec 2011 10:58:00 No.2267386 Report

Quoted By: >>2267389 >>2267392

The sky burns blue
As rain falls down
And makes the green brown

And by the way I'm 18 so you can all suck on my pubescent chode,

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:00:00 No.2267389 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267386
ooooh yes i would like to please

Cuadro De Pimiento

Cuadro De Pimiento Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:01:00 No.2267392 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267386
Brilliant! A new Milton has arisen!

How about this (I'm 18 yo, btw):

The stick sticks stickly
I feel a bit sickly
I throw up bits of prickly
Pear all about the ground

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:02:00 No.2267393 Report

Quoted By:

Really you plebs, just stop it.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:05:00 No.2267398 Report

Quoted By: >>2267401 >>2267425

I give you another of my thought-children!

Uh, camo shorts and bubble kush
We can talk she rather fuss
This and dat bout such and such
Damn, man where is the fuckin trust
Im tired of tha hootin hollerin
Im bout to take the coupe to collins
Then take a female to the islands
Uh then take her clothes off and do the honors
Yea she hear I'm wit dem otha bitches
I tol her mind her fuckin business
Shit she prolly out chea fuckin niggas
Im fuckin her friends now her friends aint even fuckin wit her
Damn she text me all day and night
So pissed off she aint even spellin shit right
I text her back and tell her it's life
Now somebody tell dem hoes I'm single for da night

Corazon Aquino di Aceitunas y Pimientos

Corazon Aquino di Aceitunas y Pimientos Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:06:00 No.2267401 Report

Quoted By: >>2267408

>>2267398
Bravo! Byron would be jealous.

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc

Corazon Di Poeta !K3LuUBl/mc Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:09:00 No.2267408 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267401
I thank you. Notice that I have made it rhyme, unlike so many contemporary... well, I feel sickened to use the word "poets" on those uncultured swine.

Cuadro De Pimiento

Cuadro De Pimiento Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:14:00 No.2267425 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267398
Yes, yes! Job well done chap! But to call it something as dirty as a "job" or anything else as worldly as what we could speak would tarnish its resplendence. Suffice it to say Good ..., chap!

Cuadro De Pimiento

Cuadro De Pimiento Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:18:00 No.2267438 Report

Quoted By: >>2267452

I'll just leave this here:
http://chanarchive.org/request_votes

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:22:00 No.2267446 Report

Quoted By:

What do you think of this, OP? I value your opinions.

You drink up the amber syrup of our autumn,
keeping the blood in your veins - despite the captain’s orders,
and I sit in the gloam of stained-wood palaces,
dreaming not of winter
but of the hot matter that wheels through town at night
saturating the pillows of sleepers
lurching them from their beds with the night terrors of our final revolution.

Long live the captain!
Long live the president!
Long live the infernal signifiers of our eternal love, our intrinsic faith,
our immaculate avalanche praise that even the pigs and the mountains acknowledge.

At least-

that's what we'd dream about.
The downhill realities of our middle class leisure
leave much more to desire, much more to overcome
than the minor injustices of a degenerate democracy.

So in the daydream unreality of our fast-food apathy jobs,
you seduce public officials before slitting their throats,
and I mix the chemicals, yes sir,
it’s all ready sir,
this bastard won’t live to see another day.

Cuadro De Pimiento

Cuadro De Pimiento Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:24:00 No.2267452 Report

Quoted By: >>2267456

>>2267438
>archived
>we're sorry, but something went wrong.
That's not fair.

Corazon Aquino di Aceitunas y Pimientos

Corazon Aquino di Aceitunas y Pimientos Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:27:00 No.2267456 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267452
chanarchive is sometimes glitchy when it first archives a thread. It usually seems to come right within a day.

It's automatically archived on warosu.org anyway:
fuuka.warosu.org/lit/thread/2267017

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:43:00 No.2267488 Report

Quoted By:

Funniest thread in /lit/.
Great troll OP.
15/10
Shit, you could even make a career out of that trolling gift you got there nigga.

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:49:00 No.2267504 Report

Quoted By:

>>2267216
Published? No fuckin way? Let's see it, man. I didn't know such people existed on /lit/.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 11:54:00 No.2267514 Report

Quoted By:

I've been working on this one for about a month, and I think it's nearly perfected. Tell me what you think, /lit/:

------------------

I like my seat down low and my window slightly
Cracked riding with a bad hoe and her girlfriend in the back
I like to get real high and never look back and you don't wanna try me don't
I look strapped

I come from the hardest city ain't nobody fucking with it
Got a black and gold sole and a fresh new Orleans fitted,
A collared polo and a pair of bally bucks

Young money, motherfucker, know you worried about us
Cash money, motherfucker, C.M.R. I trust
Never had my jaw broken but his jaw I bust
And I probably got your girlfriend on my bus
What happened on my bus stays on my bus
And that white widow weed out the jar is a must
if you gimme a cigar then a cigar I bust
Put that white widow weed in the cigar and puff
Look ma I'm trying to make a porno starring us
Well not just us, a couple foreign sluts
We could make the summer manal n tralling you all
And I be with Jim Jones and we be balling balling, yeah
Baby we balling like rawlin and spaldin pint of DJ
Screw and that Hawaiian I am leaning like a three
Legged lion climbing right to the top of the motherfucking mountain
counting I'm gonna need an accountant
To count it, many got this fucking beat pounding it's
Pounding but it was just lost until I found it, found it
Stole it like a scoundrel holly grove hounded put
This bitch to sleep fucking right I night gowned it
Niggas talking shit tell them niggas pipe down
Bitch bloods in the building and every body soundless
beating up the track like a motherfucking round fist
Blind, deaf or crazy I will spit like a long kiss
I am just a martian ain't nobody else on this
Planet I know see I live by my only
Where my cheese, nigga, where my macaroni?

-------

My major concern about the piece is that you gotta be from New Orleans to know what fuck I'm talking about.

Corazon Di Poeta

Corazon Di Poeta Tue 20 Dec 2011 12:01:00 No.2267523 Report

Quoted By: >>2267536

This is the last one I'm gonna post tonight. I like this one the best because my ex-gf inspired me to write this about two years ago.

------------------

In the night, I hear them talk the coldest story ever told
Somewhere far along this road, he lost his soul
To a woman so heartless
How could you be so heartless
Oh, how could you be so heartless?

How could you be so cold as the winter wind when it breeze yo
Just remember that you talking to me yo
You need to watch the way you talking to me yo
I mean after all the things that we been through
I mean after all the things we got into
Ayo, I know there are some things that you ain't told me
Ayo, I did some things but that's the old me
And now you wanna get me back and you gonna show me
So you walk around like you don't know me
You got a new friend, well I got homies
But in the end it's still so lonely

How could you be so Dr. Evil?
You bringing out a side of me that I don't know
I decided we weren't gonna speak so
Why we up 3 A.M. on the phone?
Why though she be so mad at me for?
Homie I don't know she's hot and cold
I won't stop wont mess my groove up
Cause I already know how this thing go
You run and tell your friends that you're leaving me
They say that they don't see what you see in me
You wait a couple months then you gonna see
You'll never find nobody better than me

Talking talking talking talk
Baby lets just knock it off
They don't know what we been through
They don't know about me and you
So why I got something new to see?
And you just gonna be keep hating me
And we just gonna be enemies
I know you can't believe
I could just leave it wrong
And you can't make it right
I'm gonna take off tonight

------------------
i miss her so msuch

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 12:05:00 No.2267529 Report

Quoted By: >>2267565

Thread summary:

OP's retarded, yet somehow shits out a halfway not terrible poem.

OP gets all buttdevastated over nothing.

We OP now.

/lit/ needs a Rose Thread

/lit/ needs a Rose Thread Tue 20 Dec 2011 12:11:00 No.2267536 Report

Quoted By: >>2267541

>>2267523
i miss her so msuch
Mumblin misery, wit my mummy
Mummy dearest, the wolfman cometh
The iceman, yes, liquid swords
Words and gourds, I am
I yam, hhhchmmm, I'm takin a bite
Outta it, outta the big apple, apple jax, rotten to the core
The third rail, I'mma rail it, I'mma piss on it
Pissed on peons, R Kelly messed wit
Mix'd it, but it don't sound any cleaner
Dem beats like breakers, surfeit in the deep
I believe that the remix of Swim added nothin to it
And now I've said my piece, I think I'll go polish
My piece beneath the sheets, g'night, /lit/
G'night, Corazon, you brazen faggot

Anonymous

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Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 12:13:00 No.2267541 Report

Quoted By: >>2267545

>>2267536
>The iceman, yes, liquid swords

What if the swords ... represented innocence?

/lit/ needs a Rose Thread

/lit/ needs a Rose Thread Tue 20 Dec 2011 12:15:00 No.2267545 Report

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>>2267541
I think if you go to this
http://www.goatse.info/
address, everything will become clear...

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Dec 2011 12:25:00 No.2267565 Report

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>>2267529
More like "OP's retarded, and shits out Creed".

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