>>25558610Coooooooooool.
Also, while I'm not knowledge in ANY of the technical stuff as far as poetry goes, I liked it.
It put a big dopey grin on my face, especially the ending.
Then again, I can be something of a sap.
But as far as critique goes:
There will two blocks that didn't seem to fit for me:
The one about other ponies judging (AJ ostensibly saying she doesn't give a shit kinda took away from the mood for me)
And the bit about staying and loyalty just seemed to circle itself.