>>3128585I went with "hot" because I felt that the term "lewd" is the kind of word that isn't typically used by the average person in informal situations so it tends to stick out and feel overused in hentai--- at least to me, anyway.
I always seem to see guys in hentai use lines like "These tits are so lewd!" and so
forth.It's just sounds odd to me.
The definition of lewd is "crude or offensive in a sexual way".
Naturally, an attractive young woman with an attractive body isn't necessarily *literally* offensive (it sure isn't to me! lol) so taking that definition into account, I felt that the "gist" of what the old guy was saying could be one of two things:
- "her body is so attractive, it's a bad thing." But that sounds too akin to saying "You're so hot, it's practically a crime..." which sounds too complimentary. OR
- her body is so sexually attractive, it's offensive because it's a bad thing, her mere presence arouses and tempts men to do bad things.
The latter sounds more derogatory/demeaning and seems to fit the situation and his actions and mindset better. I.e. "It's YOUR fault I'm violating you" or "it's only natural that you're being violated because your body is just too tempting! "
So I swapped out the odd sounding term "lewd" with "hot" and I incorporated the derogatory/offensive/demeaning connotation by adding a line to the old man's dialogue: "It's obscene the way you tempt men just standing there..."
To me, that change in dialogue works on multiple levels: it "jives" with the usage of the term "lewd" without actually using the word, satisfies the derogatory/demeaning connotation, and the underlying rape/dominination theme where it's the girl's fault for being violated because she's just too hot.
Sufficed to say, when I make changes, I don't make them lightly. I consider it "serious business" as I know how edits can be a touchy subject for a lot of hentai fans.
