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Based just on what you did to change it, the original is much better. Your linework is horrible, the bottom of her ass just looks off, and with the style of coloring you used the bangs are too simple.
The ass looks better on the original, bangs fit with the rest, and although the linework isn't that smooth, it's better than yours. But that doesn't take into account the other stuff that's annoying about them both.