hay /ic/

could I get some crit on this? Any blaring mistakes? Anything really bothering you? I haven't done a real piece of art from start to finish and I actually like this sketch so maybe I'll follow through with it.

Also I'm not going to reply with this at every crit but there is an amount of style I'm trying to pull off here so keep that in mind if you do some kinda photorealistic red-line (lol)

Thanks!