>>944529LOL
>>944498change that font. I would also change the composition, like if you want it to be in a comic style, then actually do that. if not figure out a better way for the text to work with the piece. and obviously you need to work on the figure.
it seems really cliche on its own but if you actually integrated that idea with the actual stories he told you or something like that it could work. as it is it seems like an empty concept and bad craft.