>>948192Wrong, not particularly, it is an improvement over the first. (well the lack of a nose is disturbing, but im going to chalk it up to style.
Varying the line weight will help, Line weight should either indicate light/shadow, or importance, or solidness of the material. Otherwise, your image seems flat.
When it comes to line weight, maybe you should step out of anime for a second, and cause someone else posted something about it, and look at 15th-17th century engravings? say start with Martin Schongauer and see how he uses swelling lines and different line weights, and how to get dynamic shading with just line.
