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>A single flash of light appears before my eyes, followed by shadows >I am back where I started off >Floating through darkness >I was so close that time >I made it to the crack >I saw what was inside >At first I thought it was earth >But I knew something was off >Before I could touch the crack, that thing grabbed me again >It just waits, watching me, toying with me >I don't even know what it is >I get just a little bit closer towards the crack, and it grabs me, dragging me back into the darkness >I float forward, it's the only thing I can do >I'm getting out of here, one way or another
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Bumping in hopes of keeping this thread up till the morning.
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bumping to keep this thread alive
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This is now a "Pinkie Pie breaking the 4th wall" thread until the story resumes.
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One last bump before I go to bed. This anon hopes this thread can make it to Sunday morning as I'll be out of town.
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Have another bump. I'm off to play vidya
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This story is too good not to be finished
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holy shat. i request more
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>The greys sink back into the darkness >I need to get back to the crack >It's the only thing I can do >I hold my head, it aches now >I don't know what to think >One minute she was here, and the next she's gone >She just fell apart, like those monsters >And if the greys are made by the shadow, was Twilight fake the whole time? >That must have been it, it was all another trick >I'm in hell >But what if she was real, and I just killed her >Then it's all my fault >I'm a murderer >I move towards the crack >It's the only thing I have left
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bump.
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>I place my hand on the crack's surface >I'm immediately rushed over by the blinding light >The visions return >I can see more now, it's hard to understand, but I see more >I can see others >For a second, I ask myself if I should take another one out >No, I can't. One of them is dead because of me >I took something from them >I want to give something back >I can see a human outline walk through the light >I feel much weaker now >Am I going in? Am I leaving? >The shadow quickly envelops me >It's furious >It speaks with its booming, otherworldly voice >"No" >I am back in the darkness >But not all of me is back
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>Something has happened >My body feels empty, not all there >It's like I'm walking on a tight rope >I can hear things >Voices >Thoughts >"I could make anything for you, and you want to leave me?" >I move, as if I'm running away from the voice >I feel strange, I'm moving faster, more fluidly >"Stop now! Just stop running from me" >I'm going back to the crack, and nothing is going to stop me
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>I know where I am now >Or where it wants me to be >It's a place called Ponyville >Faint black lines create the world around me >Ponies are walking around, but they look as if they could fall apart any second from now >"Heeeeeeeelllooooo, I'm Twiiiiiiiliiiggghht" >An imitation of the unicorn is in front of me, eyes blackened, skin grey >I want to destroy it >My mind is different now >I can see things differently know >I'm on the ground, but I can see things from above >I force the ground below the imitation to collapse >Fake Twilight falls through, floating away through darkness >"I don't like what's happening to you", says the shadow >I force the imitation ponyville to collapse on itself >"I don't like it one bit"
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OMG, WANT MORE!
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These greys somehow remind me of the Antispirals from Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann
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>One of the mists comes towards me >A cloud of sand >It has no eyes, but I know it's looking towards me >"Another..." >If flies off, leaving a desert behind it >I move across the sand, almost flying >A long time passes >The sand stretches on forever >The sand hasn't melted into darkness >"You won't leave here, I won't let you" >Is this a new strategy? >Is it trying to torture me? >Or is it trying to stop me?
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>As I glide through the sand, I can feel myself changing >I'm not a human anymore >But I'm not a mist, at least not yet >I'm something in between >My vision has expanded >I can see outside my body >Sometimes I wonder if my physical form is still a part of me >I remember the crack >The outline that I saw >Did I give up my physical form? >But then what was the outline I saw before that? >I look up >I move up >I'm flying now >A sandy smoke follows behind me >Pretty soon, I won't be anything like a person >I'm scared
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to bump and to summarize what i think of this story:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dN300PeKD3c Do continue, captcha demands it: speak asmenten
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>I can see the faint glow of the crack in the distance >I'll be there soon >The shadow won't stop me >But it will try >Greys flow out of the darkness, flinging themselves towards me >Right when they enter the cloud that surrounds me, they slow down, ache in pain >I pick one out, and force the smoke into its body >I am pulled along with it, and the next thing I know, I'm seeing the world through a grey's eyes >I move my vision over to another grey >I can command them to do whatever I want, move them with my will, make them into my personal army >It's empowering and strange >But soon, I'm forced out of their bodies >The break apart into shards of darkness >I can defeat the greys with ease now >They are hollow, easy to control, but still creations of the shadow >I remember the first outline from the crack >Was Twilight hollow too? Is that why she shattered? Did I really bring her here, or was it just a shell? >And if the darkness could control her outline, I could control my own outline.
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>Closer to the crack now, mists have begun following me >Many of them are made up of different elements, and others made of strange forces, hard to describe >I can hear their thoughts >"It's going to open the gate" >"It's not even its home" >"I am going to love seeing what it does there" >I can feel the shadow's anger >I think I understand what it wants now >It hates seeing me like this, like one of the mists >It wants me for itself, it wants something physical, something it didn't need to make >My transformation is taking that away from him >The darkness around me seems to shake, poorly made landscapes surround me, but the forces of the mist would quickly destroy them >I doubt they will help me through the crack, they are only amused by my actions >But at least they make traveling more entertaining, watching the worlds fall apart in an explosion of fire, ice, wind, stone
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>I'm at the crack now >The mists have dispersed >I knew they wouldn't help me here >As I near the crack, my vision starts to blur >"Stop now, you don't want to do this" >I place my hands on the crack >Black Tendrils surround me >They wrap around each other, forming a ball of tendrils >I am unable to phase through them >"If you leave, you will be something different, something you don't want to be" >Visions of destruction, death, and misery flash before me >Dead ponies everywhere >"Innocents will die because of you" >I push myself against the tendrils >"You're lying! I'm not your plaything! I am leaving now!" >The tendrils won't budge >6 ponies appear before my eyes, dead, covered with sand >Twilight is among them >"No! I won't stay!" >I flood the cage with sand, and burst out >I'm leaving
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Soooo, that was the ending? That'd be... weird.
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>>510632 Too deep for you?
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>My hands are on the crack now >They aren't hands anymore, really, more like concentrations of dust >I can see this place >Equestria >I see great things >I see myself >Or at least my outline >And I can see other ponies >And Twilight >I see so many things >Past, present, future >I can see everything >Past, present, and future >I don't like the future I see >It's always hard to understand, but the future does not look bright >I can't stay in this place, I must open the crack >I don't know what will happen, but if I hurt anyone, I don't mean it >I break the crack open >I go inside
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Well, that's the end of that
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>>511069 You're right
It's more of a spiritual addition to my last work here, which was much more pony related
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Do you have a title for this?
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type the entire story and then post it to fimfiction or something op
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>>511329 It's done now anyway, if you're just looking to get the end.
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>>510991 DONT STOP
serious, how can you stop there??
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>>511408 The story isn't finished here, per-say
Like I said in
>>511128 It's actually more of an addition to another story I wrote. It got some pretty positive reviews, but I haven't really put it anywhere yet. I probably will though, after I edit some of the spelling and such
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>>511228 No title as of now
But I'll probably come up with one eventually
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>>512127 HOLD UP is this like you are the mist from the last fic that is killing the ponies?
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>>513901 Which .MOV is that from?
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>>513901 Mmmmmm
perhaps...
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>>514878 BOOM! Dat shit be da beastest.
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