>>169457248Pretty good, anon. The natural movement needs to be there, of not the inmersion can be completely ruined. Also, the balcony thing is pretty good, but i thought that you have a random posibility that some random shit may happen to you like you see somebody falling down or there is a monster on the other side but it doesn't make anything. It only stares at you and then proceedes to leave.
And the notebook thing will be like a diary. You keep descriptions of the monsters, diary pages and files and some of the MC's notes or thoughts. Depending on how he is, the writing would sound more or less crazed or desperate